User blog comment:AkuAkuAkuma/Merry Crew of Madness/@comment-30299084-20171014000436/@comment-30299084-20171014024414

In the zone? Is that the place where writer's block disappears? If so, count me in there! Anyway. it's just my opinion but I feel like maybe you shouldn't focus too much on differentiating the verses, I feel like they already are different enough. That's just my take, it seems to me that authors a lot of times will go and write stories which have elements from previous works, but aren't necessarily the same story. There's nothing really wrong with that.

Also, using a thesaurus never hurt anybody! At least, I don't think it did. But still, it doesn't sound like you quoted the thesaurus or just randomly chose synonyms to everything when that word might not have fit in place of another, simpler word.

And hmmm, I might not have guessed it just by this. I feel like I'm reading a compendium or bestiary of some kind more than a bio, but that's not a bad thing at all! The way you've worded the characters, you could take them in a variety of different directions, depending how you yourself interpret what you've written. The middle character is written in such a way where i can't really make too many judgments, though. They're written in a way where you have to sorta fill in the blanks yourself, at least in my opinion. Which isn't a bad thing. Just makes me think that there's gonna be way more to that specific character that you're not saying and that you may not even be sure how he's gonna proceed. Still though, I like their poetic introduction, all the same.