Talk:David Beckum (Abnormalverse)/@comment-27175945-20190527192333

gonna just make a critique and say that the way you describe his intellect outside of combat is eerily close to a mary sue in that it makes him seem like he's flawless. Though, everything else is pretty good! You did a good job writing him in so far and I hope to see how you expand on his qualities (both his flaws and his virtues) in the future.